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Some are curved

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During my life, I had many obstacles and adversities that I had to overcome. Many nights as tears rolled down my cheeks, I sat in my room crying because of the treatment and the condition in which my life was in.  Read More »

The sunshine did now glow that day; its rays struggled to cut through the air that hung thick with the debris of disbelief. I sat in the room with my mother, cousin, and grandmother clinging to the words that dripped from the doctor’s mouth, his voice smooth, his accent heavy.  Read More »

It's not finished but I want to get a reaction on what I do have...

When he walks into any room it's as if a samll ray of light breaks through the shadows and falls on him; you can't help but to notice him. Without realizing or even trying, he draws attention to himself.  Read More »

ONCE AGAIN IVE BEEN LEFT. LEFT BECAUSE OF A FEW SPOKEN WORDS, WHICH MY EVERYTHING OVERHEARD. HE LEFT JUST AS SOON AS HE CAME WITHOUT A TRACE, FINGERPRINT, AND ALL MY MEMORIES HAVE BEEN ERASED. I DONT REMEMBER ANY GOOD TIMES....I JUS LONG FOR HIM TO ONCE AGAIN BE MINE. I SAID IT WAS OKAY FOR YOU TO LEAVE NOT KNOWING WAT MY TRUE IDISGRETIONS WOULD BE.  Read More »

CAN U BE IN LOVE WITH 2 PEOPLE??IF U MARRY 1 OF THOSE 2 PEOPLE CAN U LOVE THEM THE WAY THEY NEED TO BE LOVED WITHOUT HAVING A LINGERING EMOTION FOR THE OTHER??  Read More »

EVERY NIGHT I REMINISCE, OF THE THOUGHTS OF OUR WEDDED BLISS. I WANTED US TO BE EACH OTHER'S EVERYTHING 4EVER, PEOPLE WOULD ASK ME WOULD HE EVER LEAVE YOU, I WOULD ALWAYS RESPOND, "NEVER". LOOKING BACK ON THE MISTAKES I MADE, I FEEL THIS IS NECCESSARY TO SAY. EVEN THOUGH U FELT I WASNT THE ONE, OUR LOVE WILL NEVER BE DONE.  Read More »

THEY ARE MY WORLD, THEY ARE MY LIFE, THEY ARE LOVE.........................  Read More »