Critique my writing

This is another poem I wrote a while back... one that I have never ever shared with anyone...even the person who it was for... I was suffering from depression when I wrote this poem and the one I posted before it (Alone).

As the Days Go By and By

I miss you!

As the days go by and by

I try and try Not to think of you. . .  Read More »

Hry everyone, this is a poem I wrote a few years ago. Please read, and offer feedback if you like. I've never had anyone critique it. It was simply too painful to share.

Alone

Here I stand

All alone

Left in the cold

Left in the rain

With no-one to hold

No-one to ease my pain

Here I stand  Read More »

8 months and its getting close to that time

thinkin' 'bout what we shared, I felt like writin' you a rhyme

it hasn't been that long but still it feel like forever,

damn my niggah if they ever say forget her, i'd say f***in never

we been through so much s**t and you always held it down  Read More »

So this is it-- you're sitting behind a desk laboring over paper, thinking << What am I doing?  Why, and where is my pat on the back? >>  Read More »

I have somewhere in the area of seven blogs-- four of which where I have been myself.  I have given up the internet twice, television once, and blogging three times.  I have had blogs which no one read-- and blogs which eveyone I knew read regularly.
I've been pu  Read More »

Inability of Election Commission to do the polls on time was inevitable. As Sujatha Koirala said, she would not cast her vote with gun on her head.  Read More »

                    "The time for parables and hidden meaning have passed.  Read More »