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Code Blue: The young ones always die.

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Strictly speaking, this is non-progressive. It's another of my stories about life in our modern healthcare system.

It was 5 AM in the ER at Our Lady of Immaculate Grace. I was just documenting an early-morning nebulizer on a young lad when the radio crackled to life.  Read More »

My Graduation Speech

I am the Salutortian at my school and I had to right a speech for graduation. Just want you guys to critique and maybe I can get some fresh ideas for it. Thanks  Read More »

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My Brother's Keeper

 

I've been given my required reading for the entering Freshman class at Adelphi University already, and I've already made quite a dent in it. The book is called The Impossible Will Take a Little While: A citizen's guide to hope in a time of fear by Paul Loeb, and is all about the collective consciousness, social responsibility and the interdependance of humanity.

Although I think Loeb and some of the authors he has collected (names like Angelou, Mandela, Dr. King, Neruda) make good points about the shape and motivation of social change, some of the things he and his authors say make me a little leery, one particular point being that because of humanity's interconnectedness, we first have a responsibility to our neighbor, and then to ourself. He talks about the evils of isolation and selfishness, which makes me a little skeptical.  Read More »

Sometimes, I think too much.

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I think too much sometimes. And so when I'm not having a wonderful day and my friends ask me "what's up?"-- I just say "thinking..." and the meaning is already implied. You always hear the phrase "Well, no one said life was going to be easy." But when does it actually become so difficult?  Read More »

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Balancing on a Feather

She balances on a feather with a pool of hurt below
A platform made of solid rock is a step away
But she doesn't want to know

She balances on a feather and it starts to rain
She won't take shelter on the rock
Because she is ashamed of her pain

She balances on a feather, imagining she is secure
And though her friends are calling to her
She will pointlessly endure  Read More »

Medical Equipment Failures: more common than you'd think

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This is another story from the trenches at Our Lady of Immaculate Grace. While we'd all like to think that hospitals would want to keep all of their equipment in good working order, lethal malfunctions are less uncommon than they should be. Especially here. Read on.   Read More »

animal experimentation part 2

the final two paragraphs of my paper

 

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animal experimentation part 1

Here is more of my paper, I think I'm close to finishing it, then i can post a final paper for all to see :)

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