Tell me what you think.
I am applying for the Lael Miller Scholarship because my entire life I have had the dream of being a teacher. That is all that I have ever wanted to do. After 6 years of hard work, that dream finally came true. I spent 4 years at a community college and 2 years at a 4 year school. I currently have a degree in Elementary Education / Social Studies. After all that hard work, I still have not reached the finish line. After graduation and substituting in a school for many years, I have found that I want to each Special Education. To me there is nothing better then working with a child that was trouble learning. To see the look on their face when they work so hard and finally figure out a difficult problem is priceless. I want to help the children that need the most help. Also with the new law of no child left behind, having a degree in Special Education would help me. I would be able to take what I learned and apply it to the entire class not just the children with learning disabilities. Being able to do that would help all of my students.
I would love to be ale to take two classes a semester so that I could reach my goal of becoming a Special Education teacher in 2 years. In order to reach that goal I would need $2,940. So I am asking your organization and this scholarship fund if they could award me $2,940. But any amount would be greatly appreciated. I would like to be able to reach this goal without having to go to my parents for the money. They have support me in everything that I have wanted to do and I would like to show them that I can make it on my own.
I would use these fund solely for the tuition coats. I would still have to pay out for an extra fees that the college adds on as well as books and supplies. I know that I could ask for more but I want to ask for just the bare minimum so that you are able to help as many students as possible. I would like to see as many student as possible reach their goals and full potential like myself.
This will enhance my future because it will allow me to do what I have always wanted to do. I can not wait to be able to have my own class and have my own students and my own room. I can not wait until the ay when a child thanks me for helping them and for teaching them. I would love to have a child come back years later and thank me and tell me I was a role model. Being able to go back college and earn my special education degree would help me become a role model for a young child.
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Good letter. However, you just telling me what would you do with the money which is fine. But, I think you may want to tell them like who you are and what inspire you to be a teacher. My point is to make them know who you are not just why you want the money/scholarship fund.
There are several things wrong with this, and it is hard to believe you, a supposed teacher, actually wrote this.
I agree. Since this is a formal letter, I suggest that much proofreading - at least - has to be done. Second, it may be helpful to put at least one of your experiences with children (maybe those who have special needs) - how you became interested in working in that particular area and why you decided to pursue a higher degree.
Excellent advice.
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