Excerpt from "Yesterday Was Theirs"

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The following long quote is an excerpt from the sci-fi novel "Yesterday Was Theirs". The book is set in the future, where the government has dissolved into the fascist system simply called The Command. The teenagers of the time devise a plan to get away from this oppressive system and live better lives, but they will have many hurdles to overcome. The excerpt describes how The Command came into power.

It must have started with the government officials themselves. After the population crisis of 2040 they could no longer see their people. They could only see a failed scenario, like too many white lab mice in a small cage. In order to alleviate the problem, the officials had to estrange themselves from the general public and their own families. No longer would they assume that the citizens they hurt were siblings or parents or children.

They saw only numbers.

And those who understood numbers could look at the country as one equation for every difficulty. Over population? Limit the variable. To do this, they passed laws that would’ve been unthinkable in previous years. A woman was allowed only one child. When this law didn’t have the effect needed, women were sterilized after their first—and only—born.

It wasn’t enough. There were too many problems to deal with, and the government craved more control.

Slowly, the adults had to forget what life was like before. “Change is good!” some representative would announce to convince the people. “You don’t know how bad things were before.” Though they alleged that things were better now, they couldn’t help but think, perhaps subconsciously, that something was inexplicably wrong.

By this time, democracy had dissolved into the Command. It was easier this way.

The next part of their ever-modifying and diabolical plan was to control the thinking of the citizens. Yet another way to make things easier.

The mind was a dangerous tool and weapon. If people questioned what the Command decreed, anarchy would reign. For the selfish consideration of their lives, the Command made it more difficult for the people to oppose them. Threats were made. Anyone who contradicted the views of the government was removed from the equation.

At age 25 a person held responsibility over his own existence. They’d already been assigned to a career by taking the Job Aptitude Evaluation. By this time they should have realized that the government was correct in everything. A person who disagreed was wrong. Someone who made it a point to pass on this information was likely to be eliminated.

The Life Equation was so much simpler without these unstable variables.

Someone not threatening enough was controlled. They were put through a series of tests that convinced these people that resisting was not going to achieve anything.

Religion was another unnecessary variable. So many religions and so many choices made problems. The Command believed the smartest tactic was to erase religion and all its forms entirely, but the people’s faith was stronger than expected. So the Command compromised on this one issue. There would be one kind of religion for everyone. End of discussion.

The Life Equation showed not the blood, the tears, and the violence, but what should be.

Incredibly, the worst part about this period of time wasn’t the people’s lack of will or the imperturbable control over these people.

The worst part of all was the Command believed what they were doing was right.



Are you surprised that you have not heard of this book? You shouldn't be. The book technically doesn't yet exist in the published world. It's a project a friend and I are currently working on. I strongly felt that it was appropriate for Progressive U, and that the bloggers here would best understand the purpose of writing a book about a negative future. I'd love to hear your comments.

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Yay, certificate!!!!

So uh, Hero of the Day Award, huh? Did you just make that up? :)

I'll give you the certificate if you PROMISE to use the reply button from now on.

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Promise!

Hey, sometimes I forget....But I'll try not to anymore.

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Honestly, thinking about it in print, it would look kind of funny just by the length of the paragraphs. There's no descriptive pretext to build a mental picture on. From the first sentence where you suggest a totalitarian future you are for all intents and purposes competing against Orwell's 1984. So I might suggest taking anything remotely different from 1984 which is dark and gray and, as you seem to be heading with it, gloss it over with a rosy sheen. Then somehow spring it on the reader that this is 1984 with a rosy sheen. 1984 is that prevalent in most peoples psyches.

Then there is the other way, you can continue with your pattern of call and response where a sentence answers each paragraph and you do all the readers thinking for them. That might go over real big. But then, what do I know?

Anyway, don't mind me, I'm just jealous that you won the much lauded Nicholas Aden Hero of the Day Award

Restoring Faith In Humanity One Acquaintance At A Time

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The story is like 1984 in that it portrays a "negative utopia", but it isn't meant to be a copy of that novel.

The rosey sheen? You might have ot elaborate on this. Do you make it less scary/more happy? In order for the government to be seen as a serious threat in the story, it's meant to be bleak. That way the characters have a reason to hope for a better future.

The excerpt is also an aside or what's called an "intercalary chapter". This is a technique used in literature in which more information is presented that doesn't exactly flow with the action of the story.

Hey, I won't mind you. I'm just glad for the comment!

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A short time after your reply I was checking out what an "intercalary chapter" chapter was being as I felt ignorant not knowing what one was. I probably would have guessed it on a multiple choice quiz maybe even an essay question but it was interesting to learn about, so thanks for the enlightenment.

Yeah "rosy" hmm. That was just a first blush sort of thing. On second read I'm not exactly sure what I thought seemed rosy about your "intercalary chapter" even compared to 1984.

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Well, I'm glad I enlightened someone! :)

And about the "rosy" comment: We don't always know WHY we write things, so don't worry about it. Sometimes I comment on people's blogs and then I have to go in and edit it because I don't want the meaning misconstrued.

Now this get's me wondering about what made you think "rosy" in the first place. Hmmm. Interesting.

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